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Heart of Darkness by PatrickBrown Heart of Darkness by PatrickBrown
Ok so here's another character concept for my comic i'm creating. A few days ago I uploaded the female version:



So I thought I'd try out the male version again, I'm just trying to compare so I can pick the right one! Please give me some feedback, let me know which direction I should go ;)

I also tried a different name for it, It was Darkness Within but now I'm thinking something like Heart of Darkness??? Has more of a kick to it I think ;) But I really don't want to send the wrong message with the title, it needs to sound good, I'm worried Heart of Darkness makes people think him/her is evil or a bad! Still got a heroic story to it, just powered by dark emotions ;)

I had so much fun with this one, it just came out of nowhere too! Maybe it's the way I'm feeling these days, I think it shows..
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Your at a level where I look at your work and say-

"This guy makes art at a professional level, which leaves me to assume that the decisions that are made when creating art are made because you purposely chose to make them."

That being said, unfortunately I don't think I could traditionally critique you. I feel like to "critique" someone at your level it would need to be more of a back and forth discussion. You explain what your art is doing and I either agree or disagree on whether or not it is working to the extent in which you intend it to.


I'm no illustrator and so I'm not as familiar with processes and obstacles that one would run into when creating a comic.

When I read the caption for both the male and female concepts, I would personally go with male. The reason I would say male, is almost entirely based on the fact that the you mention the females hair growing as she becomes angered. I feel like this could become a sort of nuisance to both you and the viewer. Maybe it's just me, but I can see issues with something like this where figuring out compositions to place a figure with hair that flows out 12 feet behind her could interfere with what's actually going on within the page and within the story.

If the idea of the growing hair gets canned I would say choose the female. It would be nice to see a lead female character, especially one that looks as intimidating as her. I would watch out for the design of the male character, when I first saw this picture I thought I was looking at a concept for something relating to "Brutal Legend", just me though, take it for what you will.

I've seen mentions in other posts about your title being used or taken somewhere else, I don't know if it has been or not, but that's something you would definitely want to look into.

Sorry for the rant just my opinions, sorry I couldn't be of more help relating to technical aspects of your concepts. I just feel like I would need spark a conversation with you to really open up the doors of giving you a more formal critique.


All this being said, I think you could pull off a very professionally published comic. You are miles ahead of a lot people trying to achieve the same thing. I've been a fan for a while and it's nice to take a break from sifting through contemporary fine artists to just simply enjoying what you do.

Looking forward to seeing you publishing a comic in the future. Best of luck to you.

-ML Smith
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:iconeinhajar12:
einhajar12 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2015  Student Artist
dislocated jaw much?
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:iconener42:
ENER42 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013
But heart of darkness is a game. Isn't it?
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:icontrent-redfern:
trent-redfern Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
Dare I say it? have others said it?
I'm just gonna say it...


FFUUSS ROOHH DAAAAAHH!!!
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:iconjoseppe619:
joseppe619 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
AMAZING.
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:iconskech287:
skech287 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2012
There's nothing to say that everyone has not said already. LOVE IT YOUR ARTWORK and YOUR STYLE!
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:iconsplendorent:
SplendorEnt Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012  Student General Artist
Tats kind of remind me of Kratos, and Kratos is kind of awesome!
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:icon12avendesigner:
12avendesigner Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011   Artist
veryveryveryveryveryveryveryGOOOOOD:D
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:iconlymne:
Lymne Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2011
Oh. Have you read the book?
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:iconarcainians:
Arcainians Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
the name could even be mark of death
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:iconlydywyn:
Lydywyn Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
and the man is cooler
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:iconlydywyn:
Lydywyn Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
take the man! (the girl looks like my no1 OC!)
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:iconrobonightmare:
Robonightmare Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2011  Student Writer
His mouth is freaking massive! lol
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:iconvhsback:
VHSback Featured By Owner May 15, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I saw this drawing as grafiti on a wall in Delft :D
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:iconthetravelingbard:
thetravelingbard Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2011
do you have a link where I can go to read this comic? Or is it paper only? Looks very interesting!
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:iconryk:
ryk Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Someone recently made a graffity of this one on a wall in Delft, the Netherlands. I recognized your style immediately..
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:iconbeachelf:
beachelf Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2011
:clap: :iconbummy1: Awesomely Awesomeness! :iconbummy1: :clap:
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:iconousmain:
Ousmain Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2011   Digital Artist
Nice done.
Heart of Darkness in a good one btw.
Its nice that you've had fun with this one, 'cause thats the most important, having fun what you're doing.
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:iconousmain:
Ousmain Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2011   Digital Artist
Oh thats beautifull done.
Great job.
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:iconoutsidefate:
OutsideFate Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2010  Student Digital Artist
Anatomy=awesome
Flow=awesome
sensation-of-pain= pefect.

the "power mark/tattoo" is a little too much, however.
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SimpleAnimeFan Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010
I wouldn't refer to the comic as Heart of Darkness, as some people may think when first seeing the name that the story is linked to the novel called 'Heart of Darkness' which is about a guy lost in africa. So you can see the difference between your idea and that there I'm sure. I'd actually switch around you're original title and call it "Within Darkness" as to me that sounds a heck of a lot cooler - but again it depends on the story and how much influence darkness actually has to it.
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JulianoPereira Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
Honestly, that's super-awesome, pal. Really good work you did here.
I see a little of Humberto Ramos influence here... It makes this even better.
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:iconshingoart:
Shingoart Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2010   Interface Designer
cooool
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:iconestepho:
estepho Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
this is super awesome.
p.s. yknow heart of darkness is the name of a classic literary novel of merit. just sayin. XD
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:icondesert-chimera:
Desert-Chimera Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
This guy's badass.

I'd choose him.

He broke the ground with his anger.
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:iconzondajag:
zondajag Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2010   Interface Designer
very metal, i like it
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:icondom-dynamite-murphy:
Dom-Dynamite-Murphy Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2010   Filmographer
When this is out im gettin it...looks sick man!
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:icontyler-listening:
tyler-listening Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010
There is already a book named the Heart of Darkness...just in case that matters to you. A fantastic piece. The female version is one of my favorites on deviantART period, but I enjoy this one as well.

I do writing myself. If you want someone with an unbiased opinion to give you some feedback, I'd be more than willing.

Great work!
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keihard Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2010
Hey dude,

I just checked your artworks (again, for the who knows how many time) and I just realised that your first sketches of Darkness Within already were posted like 2 years ago! Wow dude, start the comic! I can't wait! Altough it is great to see that you really kept the idea and didn't leave it on a shelf.
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PatrickBrown Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Haha yeah I know, I've been really slack with it! But I still am really happy with the idea and story I've got planned so I'll no doubt get back into it someday ;)

Thanx
-Pat
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:iconkeihard:
keihard Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2010
Can't wait man. And about your dilemma on the main character...why don't you let the female and male team up? Like 2 equal sidekicks?
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Psycho-Rhyno Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010
Personally I like the dude better, but thatmay just be because he looks like a Brutal Ledgend Guy, like your critic said.

Also, Heart of Darkness is over used, and the title of a Joseph Conrad book about a guy who goes to Africa intent on helping the natives in their poverty, but ends up using them for his own gain. Also, that book inspired "Lord of the Flies."

Make of that what you will.

ps: Your art is awesome; sorry for ranting!
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Morkex Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010
Heart of Darkness is a bit cliché and cheesy, so I would advice picking another name. But anyways, pretty awesome work. Personaly I think you should go for a female protagonist, but you definatly ougtha have this character in the comic. Keep up the good work! :D
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XMrBlue Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2010
Brilliant.

Hard to decide between the two, I think I like this one better because of all the emotion in it.
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ArBoL-6 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2010  Professional Filmographer
Oh my I wish I can see it someday. Will it be a webcomic, or I have to look in comic stores? XD
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phenoms Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2010
Oh, and this SO makes me think of some Steven Sanchez art... I actually thought it was his until I saw it wasn't his name. I love San's style, it led to noticing your stuff so consider it a compliment. Really like your art.
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:iconpatrickbrown:
PatrickBrown Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow thanx, yeah Sanchez is a great artist! I'm a fan too :D
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phenoms Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2010
What about using "Dark Emotions" or something to that effect as the title? The other two titles are less telling, though of them, I find Darkness Within more catchy. "Darkly Driven" or something?
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:iconzer0samuraix:
zer0samuraix Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2010
both are good, but i prefer the female cuz its just sexier with a girl kicking butt
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:iconrangaxt:
RangaXT Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2010
whooooaaa 0.0
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:iconthelearningcurv:
thelearningcurv Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2010
can't wait to seem more from this!!!!!
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:iconrazen-sketch:
razen-sketch Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2010
hehe
its awesome dude
:D
i think you'l have more fun with the male character
cos you can introduce allota chicks ;)
and it looks more heavy metal and interesting if it was a guy
loved the art work
awesome as usual :D
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:iconpumpkinbrain:
Pumpkinbrain Featured By Owner May 26, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
Good impact...
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:iconxmrblue:
XMrBlue Featured By Owner May 26, 2010
BAdass
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M0nk3m4n Featured By Owner May 24, 2010
Well, as usual I feel a bit dumb having only "This is really great, love the details, ect" to say...
but I'm not good with words when it comes to describing what parts of a piece that I like. :P
This way at least you know I've seen the work & I find it exceptional. Awesome job, Pat.
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:iconpatrickbrown:
PatrickBrown Featured By Owner May 24, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow thanx ;)
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:iconm0nk3m4n:
M0nk3m4n Featured By Owner May 24, 2010
You're welcome, man.
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dragonsheart87 Featured By Owner May 19, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
luv the title n it should be male...a male would really suit the character profile...tattoos r cool too :)
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:iconpricey9000:
pricey9000 Featured By Owner May 19, 2010  Student General Artist
Very impressive there is a good depiction of movement in this piece.
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:iconzeelend:
Zeelend Featured By Owner May 15, 2010
very very very nice
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:icontsau-mia:
tsau-mia Featured By Owner May 14, 2010
They should be twins.

Mostly I can't decide because they're both awesome.
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